Allow me to run something by you. Take a look at the second sentence — the one beginning with Plucked, on the seventh line. It's about a Giants running back, and it's a giant run-on. The sentence keeps on churning, all the way to Bears on the 19th line. With some tweaking, we can have it up and running again. A simple solution would be to change that comma after Giants to a semicolon or, better still, place a period after Giants and capitalize the.That's it for today. I've got to run.
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